WIP Diagnostic: Is This Working? A Closer Look at a YA Fantasy First Page – Therapy Box

WIP Diagnostic: Is This Working? A Closer Look at a YA Fantasy First Page

Critique by Janice Hardy, @Janice_Hardy

WIP Diagnostics is a weekly column that studies a snippet of a work in progress for specific issues. Readers are encouraged to send in work with questions, and we diagnose it on the site. It’s part critique, part example, and designed to help the submitter as well as anyone else having a similar problem.

If you’re interested in submitting to WIP Diagnostics, please check out these guidelines. 

Submissions currently in the queue: Five

Please Note: As of today, critique slots are booked through June 19.

This week’s questions:

1. Is this a good opening scene? Would you pay to read on, if this were a genre you liked?

2. Is Prentice (the MC) likeable? Can you empathize with her?

3. Are the stakes big enough for a YA novel?

4. Prentice’s family is Chinese/British and they live in the UK. Is this setting clear or confusing? (Might I need to say they’re in London, for example.)

5. Is there too much information in this scene for the reader to process?

6. Is the voice right for YA?

Market/Genre: Young Adult Fantasy

On to the diagnosis…
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